第八周 亮点句式润色的七大原则
作文要想得高分,必须要有吸引阅卷老师眼球的亮点。如何打造亮点句式呢?大家可以遵循以下七个原则。
原则一:新颖性
改掉句中的俗词,或合理调整句子语序,都有助于提升句子的新颖性。新颖的句子能为评卷者在评卷过程中带来良性体验,能有效提升作文表达和分值。
1.变换用词
行文时,既要避免使用俗词,又要避开冷僻词汇。
(1)Moreover, I will open more channels for you to speak out your opinions and need.
→Moreover, I will open more channels for you to voice your opinions and need.(2013·天津高考书面表达)
另外,我会开发更多渠道,让你们说出观点和需求。
(2)I believe very much that a wise choice leads to perfection.
→I am pretty convinced that a wise choice leads to perfection.(2013·上海高考满分作文)
我坚信,英明的选择会通向完美。
2.变换语序